Need help with homework

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tjpuser
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Need help with homework

Post by tjpuser » Sun 03.14.2010 10:20 pm

Hi guys, I need help with a homework which requires me to write about my hobbies (3) and why i like them. I am a beginner level 1 student and so there's not much that i can write about. this is what i have so far which is simple and short.

http://img191.imageshack.us/img191/1784/85182295.jpg

I have an essay exam tomorrow so I tried using some new stuff to prepare for it in the answer so that i can have feedback if any of them are wrong. I find it quite hard to write/translate with limited grammar and vocab.

NileCat
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Re: Need help with homework

Post by NileCat » Tue 03.16.2010 9:36 am

Good work, tjpuser.
I like your writing.

わたしのいちはんすきなしゅみはパソコンのつかうことです。
→いち
→パソコン

ななさいにパソコンをもちましたから。
→ななさい(or 七さいで or 7さいで) or ななさいのときに

そして、パソコンでインターネットをつかって、ゲムをあそびます。
→インタネット (the "bar" has to be vertical like "l")
→ゲム (game)is not ゲム

つそれから、おんがくをきくことがすきです。
→Delete the first ""

おんがくをきかてから、わたしはしあわせをかんじます。
→"きかてから" is wrong. "おんがくをきくと" would be what you want to say.
or "おんがくをきいていると" perhaps.

そして、わたしは宇多田ヒカルのうたかすきで。
→ うた
→ すきです

さはのしゅみはえいがことです。
→ I don't know what you mean by "さは".
→ "えいがです。" or "えいがをみることです。"

えいがはとてもおもしるくて、いいてす。
→ おもしくて、いいす。(る&ろ is confuing. And small dotts are important!)

まいしゅうこいびととえいがかんへいきます。
→ Perfect!.

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