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学生の作文。

Postby Minarai » Wed 04.07.2010 2:57 pm

学生の作文。

皆さんこんばんは。私はダニーロと言います。大学生で一年生です。私の大学は「オリエンターレ」と言います。「オリエンターレ」大学はとても古いです。私は月曜日から金曜日まで「オリエンターレ」大学に行きます。土曜日と日曜日は休みです。毎日たくさん勉強しますけど、日本語が好きです。時々、大学の勉強は難しいですが、いつも友達に会いますから、楽しいです。大学には日本人の先生もイタリア人の先生もいます。日本人はよ人ですが、イタリア人はふたりです。日本語の試験がありますから、少し心配です。試験でたくさん勉強します。前は日本語は易しかたですけど、今は日本語は難しくなっています。
たくさん勉強してから、日本に行きたいです。日本が好きなんです。私は時々、勉強するあいだ、音楽を聞きます。

Hard work for me! :sweatdrop: Hoping that 2 % of what I wrote is (more or less) correct! :D
If you want and if you have some time to spend, feel free to correct and feel free to criticize my "sakubun".

どうぞよえおしくお願いします。
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Re: 学生の作文。

Postby tōkai devotee » Wed 04.07.2010 8:34 pm

That looks fairly good to me! No major errors. Well done!
Just one thing I noticed....

Instead of 大学生で一年生です, simply say 大学で一年生です.

がんばってください!:)
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Re: 学生の作文。

Postby Minarai » Thu 04.08.2010 4:46 pm

Thank you very much for your help, tokai devotee-san.
I'll mind "大学で一年生です" in future!

Ganbarumasu yo! :D

Mata doumo arigatou gozaimashitama, really :)
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Re: 学生の作文。

Postby NileCat » Thu 04.08.2010 8:49 pm

Hey Minarai,

It seems that you've been improving very quickly.
Only a coulpe of things I noticed:

日本人はよ人ですが → 日本人は四人 or 4人
試験でたくさん勉強します → the meaning seems a little vague.
You study a lot at the exam?
You study a lot for the exam?
試験のためにたくさん勉強します。or 試験があるのでたくさん勉強します。would sound more natural.
前は日本語は易しかた → 易しかった
勉強するあいだ、音楽を聞きます → OK We usually say 勉強しながら音楽を聴きます。

Overall, 98% are correct.
Good work, Minarai!
Keep going!
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Re: 学生の作文。

Postby Minarai » Sat 04.10.2010 6:02 am

Hello NileCat!!
NileCat wrote:Only a coulpe of things I noticed:

日本人はよ人ですが → 日本人は四人 or 4人

Oh, it's true! I forgot to use kanji or number for よ人!! Thank you!

NileCat wrote:試験でたくさん勉強します → the meaning seems a little vague.
You study a lot at the exam?
You study a lot for the exam?


I wanted to test this particular construction of sentences using "Noun (=Cause) + で + Sentence (effect).
Just like this example which is in my book :

a) Doubutsuen ha dou deshitaka
b) Sore ga , kaze de ikimasen deshita.
a) Sou desuka. zannen deshita ne.
b) Ee.

kaze de ikimasen deshita > Because of "Kaze", I didn't go there.
I though it would have been clear the fact that
" because of (I have/there is an) exam I'm studying a lot (to pass it) <> 試験でたくさん勉強します".

Maybe I have to use "Noun (=Cause) + で + Sentence (effect)" in clearer context...

NileCat wrote:試験のためにたくさん勉強します。or 試験があるのでたくさん勉強します。would sound more natural.


Great! I'll write down these sentences :wink:

NileCat wrote:前は日本語は易しかた → 易しかった

Oh yeah, I missed "っ" between "か" and "た" :roll:

NileCat wrote:OK We usually say 勉強しながら音楽を聴きます。

Ok, I've got it!

NileCat wrote:Hey Minarai,

It seems that you've been improving very quickly.Overall, 98% are correct.
Good work, Minarai!
Keep going!


Doumo arigatou gozaimashita :blush:

Ps: I'm having problems with my Pc so I cannot use programmes to write in kana or kanji. Gomen!
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