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My attempt at a proper intro

Postby leonl » Tue 07.01.2008 10:07 pm

はじめまして
ぼくのなまえはリオンルウイスです。だいがくにねんせいです。はたちです。
せんきゅうひゃくはちじゅうななねんに うまれました。シアトルしにすんでいます.
SSCCだいがくえいきますにほんごをよくはなしたい。いちばんすきなかもくです。
まいにちごぜんくじじゅぴんかれごごじゅうにじまでにほんごのクラスがあります。
テレビゲームーをするのがすきで。ぼくもにほんごをべんきょいするのがだいすきです。
どうぞよろしくおねがいします


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Re: My attempt at a proper intro

Postby chikara » Tue 07.01.2008 11:22 pm

初めまして
TJPへようこそ!

leonl wrote:.... SSCCだいがくえいきますにほんごをよくはなしたい ...

えいきます :?
I don't know what that word is. Is it the ~masu form of a verb? If it is I don't think it belongs between two nouns (university, Japanese) like that.

leonl wrote:..... まいにちごぜんくじじゅぴんかれごごじゅうにじまでにほんごのクラスがあります .....

じゅぴん :?
かれ is maybe meant to be から
I think you are trying to say "Every day from 9:00am until 12:00pm (I) have a Japanese class"

leonl wrote:..... ぼくもにほんごをべんきょいするのがだいすきです。.....

I assume べんきょい is a typo for べんきょう
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Re: My attempt at a proper intro

Postby leonl » Tue 07.01.2008 11:32 pm

Jyuupun(10 minutes is in 9:10)

i probably should have put spaced it out and checked it before i posted it.


SSCC だいがく え いきます

I go to SSCC (community college)
Yes I was trying to say I have Japanese class from 9 to 12
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Re: My attempt at a proper intro

Postby chikara » Tue 07.01.2008 11:40 pm

leonl wrote:Jyuupun(10 minutes is in 9:10)...

ぴん <> pun, it is pin.

leonl wrote:..... SSCC だいがく えいきます

I go to SSCC (community college)

OK, so え is actually the particle へ and いきます is the ~masu form of いく. That makes a bit more sense.
I still don't believe you can have a ~masu form verb in the middle of a sentence like that.

Edit: I probably would say "I go to college to do X" but more "at college I do X";

SSCC だいがくで.....
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Re: My attempt at a proper intro

Postby leonl » Tue 07.01.2008 11:45 pm

chikara wrote:
leonl wrote:Jyuupun(10 minutes is in 9:10)...

ぴん <> pun, it is pin.

leonl wrote:..... SSCC だいがく えいきます

I go to SSCC (community college)

OK, so え is actually the particle へ and いきます is the ~masu form of いく. That makes a bit more sense.
I still don't believe you can have a ~masu form verb in the middle of a sentence like that.


Oh I see what you mean I guess the period that I imagined after sunde imasu didn't get in there. My apologies. Also i just forgot about the particle e mistake I'm really rusty.

Oh the pin thing I didn't catch at all thanks for pointing it out I see how that could confues me.
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