Help improve my passage, please?

[FlonneTheFallenAngel]

Deleting a thread forces people to forget. That is the gun. If later someone attempts to search this thread out, they won't be able to find it. That is the threat.

To be honest, I don't really think that deleting a thread is an act which can be directly compared to regular conversation. It's something that just doesn't exist in regular conversation.

[coco]

How about using a dictionary next time? Automatic translators should not be used to translate into a language other than your own for anything other than laughs. They should be used to translate into your own language only to get a rough idea of what is meant.

Are you sure that she used an automatic translator?
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FlonneTheFallenAngel -san, はじめまして。
I am Japanese and can't write English correctly, but I want to say something to you. Please allow me to use my poor English.

I believe you made your Japanese compositions by yourself, because that didn't seem to be an output of Auto-translator.
I think you are doing well even though there were some mistakes. I mostly understand what you wanted to say. ( I hope my English is mostly understandable too.)

In any case, I handed in a final copy of my passages to my teacher, and he discovered a few mistakes that I have now corrected.

That's good. Please keep up your Japanese study.

Would it be possible to now get this topic deleted?

Technically, you can delete your image file and your comments. (Enter from the edit button on OP, then erase [img ] url.)
I am really sorry that TJP is not friendly.

[richvh]

How about using a dictionary next time? Automatic translators should not be used to translate into a language other than your own for anything other than laughs. They should be used to translate into your own language only to get a rough idea of what is meant.

Are you sure that she used an automatic translator?

She said so herself:

It's just that at that point I couldn't be bothered trying to figure out the hiragana for them, after I got the words from Google Translate.

She used google translate as a substitute for a dictionary (though not as a composition tool - I did not accuse her of doing that.) There are plenty of online dictionaries available, and an automatic translator is a poor substitute for one, giving only one word for what you're looking up, and no indication of what sense of the word you're looking up is being translated.

[FlonneTheFallenAngel]

There are plenty of online dictionaries available

To be honest, I hadn't actually thought of looking up a proper online dictionary.

Silly me.

[AJBryant]

To be honest, I hadn't actually thought of looking up a proper online dictionary.