Could anyone help fix this?

[phreadom]

http://thejapanesepage.com/grammar/chap ... mment-3021

I'll be more than happy to fix the page content, but I'd like help with coming up with something better and more accurate?

Thank you!

[Ongakuka]

What's wrong with it Phreadom?

[phreadom]

What's wrong with it Phreadom?

Well, let me rephrase that... apparently it's not so much the examples, but the explanations of the examples that is confusing and/or wrong.

To show the state of becoming... something, use ～に　なります ni narimasu The ni is placed after what is becoming something. The narimasu means to become. Nouns and -na adjectives use ni narimasu. -i adjectives are different, but for now there are enough useful nouns to look at:

Perhaps changing the one part to

The ni is placed after what is becoming something (or became something, or might become something... depending on the conjugation used, as the examples illustrate below)

Or something similar?

[AJBryant]

It occurs to me there's a mistake there. The "ni" doesn't come after WHAT is becoming -- it comes after what it (which is the subject) IS becoming.

[phreadom]

It occurs to me there's a mistake there. The "ni" doesn't come after WHAT is becoming -- it comes after what it (which is the subject) IS becoming.

Ah, I get what you're saying... how about...

To show the state of becoming... something, use ～に　なります ni narimasu.
The ni is placed after what something is becoming (or became, or might become... depending on the conjugation used, as the examples illustrate below).
The narimasu means to become. Nouns and -na adjectives use ni narimasu. -i adjectives are different, but for now there are enough useful nouns to look at: