Genki Ch. 6. Any thoughts on this conversation?

[RichMusic81]

Hi guys,

Currently on Genki Chapter 6. As the review exercises don't have answers because they involve partner work (I don't have a partner!), I was wondering if someone could help me out and tell me if I've written this correctly.

The situation is

Partner A has a date tomorrow and wants to borrow Partner B's car. Partner B's car is brand new and he doesn't want anyone to use it.

Here's what I wrote:

A) すみません。くるまをかりてもいいですか。
B) くるまですか。どうして。
A) あしたはデｰイですから。
B) ども、くるまがかりてはいけません。くるまをあたらしいから。

I think it's mostly there but should the が in the final sentence be を or should there be no particle?
Not a 100% certain about my conjugated verbs in the first and last line either.

Cheers,
Rich.

[Shiroisan]

Anyone, please correct me if I say something wrong here

A) あしたはデｰイですから。

Did you mean "date"? If so, you're last character was incorrect: デート

B) ども、くるまがかりてはいけません。くるまをあたらしいから。

I'm not sure where you got those particle ideas from...
Also just wondering if you are aware that you dropped the politeness level on あたらしいから。 As it's a seperate sentence, you would use ですから　to maintain politeness.　　

くるまをかりてはいけません。くるまはあたらしいですから。

Lastly it's a little odd to mention the car by name twice in quick succession. It would be more natural to say,

あたらしいから、くるまをかりてはいけません。

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[RichMusic81]

Hi,

Yeah, デｰイ was a mistyping.

Thanks for pointing out the particles. I suspected they were wrong. Shall have to look over them again!

I also thought it was a bit unnatural to repeat car twice in quick succession. Didn't realise it was ok to use から in the middle of the sentence.

Thanks for your help,
Very much appreciated.

[Shiroisan]

Didn't realise it was ok to use から in the middle of the sentence.

That's not your fault; I forgot that Genki doesn't teach you that until lesson 9. I think it's a little weird that they didn't just teach it with から　in lesson 6.