blog correcting

[Lego]

I have started a blog to train myself in japanese, as I think that forcing myself to write something with a sense is better than endless repeats of examples
Since no one knowing japanese reads my blog, I'll post the entries here to get them corrected!

here's the first, and only, one

今晩は。

私はダリオです。

日本語の書きを独学しますから、私はこのblogを創造しました。

私の書いたものを訂正してください。

I think this will be the only entry for a while, as I'm going to my parents' for the holidays
thanks for the help!

p.s. the subject is horrible, but I wanted to differentiate it from the usual "training" or "help"

[paul_b]

挨拶の「今晩は」はかなで書くべきです。

[Lego]

ありがとうございます。
blogでそれを訂正しました。
日本語に書くことは難しいです！　

Next summer I'll go to Japan to study there for a couple of months, so I want to learn the most I can before leaving!
I wanted to write this in japanese, but it was too difficult :@

[richvh]

日本語に書くことは難しいです！

日本語で書くことは難しいです！

[Lego]

Thank you for the correction
I'm at my mother's house for the holidays, and I don't have japanese support on the pc here. I've written other things, but I'd have to write them here in romaji. :@
Maybe I'll just wait to go back home.

[Lego]

here is my poem!
lol I feel like 8 years old again

watashi wa christmas ni okaasan no ie e ikimashita.
okaasan to obaasan wa roma ni sumimasu kara, shibashiba watashi wa kanojo to aimasen.
okaasan kara nihon e ikou de kaban o moraimashita.
nijuugonichi ni watashitachi wa ongakukai o kikimashita.

I guess this is full of errors, as it was a bit too experimental for my knowledge-level

[miha]

Lego wrote:

日本語の書きを独学しますから、私はこのblogを創造しました。

上の文は、通じますが自然な日本語ではありません。

例文：　私は日本語の書き方（writing）を独学で勉強していますので、このブログ（blog）を作りました。

ほかにもいい、例文があると思いますが、参考にしてください。

理由：

創造は、間違っていませんが、大（おお）げさかな？天地創造（てんちそうぞう＝ｔｈｅ Creation）を想像（そうぞう）してしまいます。

創作もいいかなあと思ったけど、これも、小説などならいいかもしれません。

それで、いろいろ考えたら、「作る」が一番、いいかなと思いました。

これからも、がんばって、勉強してください。

[Lego]

miha thanks for answering, but I'll have to wait to go back home to read your reply

is it correct to answer this way to this question?

q: anata no daigaku wa doko desu ka?
a: watashi no daigaku wa nihon ni arimasu.

I guess this is not the correct answer, but I can't remember the right one

thanks

[richvh]

Lego wrote:
miha thanks for answering, but I'll have to wait to go back home to read your reply

is it correct to answer this way to this question?

q: anata no daigaku wa doko desu ka?
a: watashi no daigaku wa nihon ni arimasu.

I guess this is not the correct answer, but I can't remember the right one

thanks

Looks fine to me.

[miha]

Hi Lego,

Lego wrote:

is it correct to answer this way to this question?

q: anata no daigaku wa doko desu ka?
a: watashi no daigaku wa nihon ni arimasu.

This question has two meanings. One is what name of your universiy is, the other one is Where your university is. In the former, you have to answer "xxxxx desu" or "xxxxx daigaku desu." In the latter, your answer is right.

But, I think most Japanese ask you as the first one in that guestion.

If you ask a question like below

q; anata no daigaku wa doko ni arimasu ka?

You can answer it as you said.
a: watashi no daigaku wa nihon ni arimasu.

It's clear.

wakarimasita ka?

[Lego]

Interesting answer, I never saw doko used that way in my books! sigh it's very hard to learn a new language
thanks!

[miha]

Hi Lego,

I tried to think about that after i saw your reply. “doko” is usually “where” as you think so. (your question may be intermediate level)

But in this case, the question is

What “daigaku” do you belong to?

More clear?

[Lego]

yeah, thank you miha
now I'm finally back at home and I can read your previous reply! It looks like it'll took me some time to translate it

no one corrected my "poem", is it correct?

[Lego]

私はクリスマスに母の家へ行きました。

母と祖母はローマに住みますから、しばしば彼女会いません。

母から日本へ行こうで鞄をもらいました。

二曙ﾜ日に私たちは音楽会を聞きました。



きのう私はボロニアの家へ帰りました。

二番大学のしけんをべんきょうしなければならない。

私は少し時間を持っていますが、たっせいしろと思っています。

[Lego]

I finally found a penpal!
this what I wrote... I kept it very very simple, but I'm sure I've managed to do a lot of errors

ゆこさん，こんいちは。
マイルを書けてありがとうございます。
お元気ですか？
私の日本語を訂正してください。
私は日本語が下手です。
あいちは日本のどこですか？　私はボロニア(bologna)に住んでいます。　イタリアの北にボロニアがあります。ローマで生まれました。
私は映画が大好きです。　先週"the prestige"を見ました。立派な映画です。

I think that the last sentence is a bit... mm bold?
I'd like to say something like "for me, it's a very good movie", but I don't have a clue on how to say it ^^;


edit: reading it another time I think that maybe I could omit ボロニアが and just say　イタリアの北あります。 would it be correct?
I think I've completely misused 私 :/